http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MR78OaVmysw

*crosses fingers*

this is a much, MUCH better version, it's actually now halfway mediocre. The music is different (and much better) the editing is less slow and choppy, and there is a new opening and a new ending.

so, did you at least enjoy a little bit of it?

I laffed on the inside when I saw the title.

Anyways... opening! The opening was fantastic, though I thought the bounce of the WMM old film effect was distracting (and a bit cliche for anyone who has much knowledge of WMM). The opening credits were great, they showed up, but they were subtle enough that they didn't detract from the speech. The shadowed lighting was well done. The window would've look better if it had a warmer tone, but maybe that's just me.

While watching the scene after the title screen, it occured to me that it would be nice to have a location subtitle. Since there's an opening sequence now, the entire movie doesn't take place in the same place. It'd be nice to let the viewer know where the new action is taking place.

Editing was better. Music was better (still hate that music at the beggining >.>)

OH. I just realized what bothers me about the clip where you try to shoot but find out that you're out of ammo. If you had no ammo, the gun wouldn't have any recoil. Not that you can do anything about that now, but... yeah.

Oh, and I just had another random thought. You should check out Wax. It's a pretty sweet free post-production editor. You can do really great looking 3D titles, effects, particles, etc. You might want to play around with it to get a better explosion.

You need a beep... beep... beep... sound effect for the bomb. I know it's corny, but it makes it more recognizable and instantly identifiable (I know that was redundantly repetitive...)

ok, I took both DoF's and lyg's advice and re-uploaded it with subtitles and a beeping sound effect. hope that satisfies.

so, I'm just wondering, from an amateur standpoint, is it any good?

I'd say it's decent, sans the set and acting.

And plot. But... you know.

Ridge Road? Hey, that's like, my school.

Ridge road is the road that runs through almost all of my town, so I used that.

And DoF, do you think you could supply me with a link to Wax? (google turns up too many links for me)

http://www.debugmode.com/wax/download.php

wait, is Wax an editing system or just something you can use to add effects?

You can edit.

what is this.

i don't even